In the dark of the night she planned her escape. She had been under the yoke for a long time. She wanted to be free so badly she could almost taste it! At dawn, she broke her shackles. Escape was not going to be easy. She waited for that precise moment when she didn’t hear anything stirring. Holding her breath, she crawled over the thorns and through the minefield for what seemed like an eternity. The door to her deliverance was in sight. Her heart leaped, but she couldn’t rejoice just yet. Just a little further. Her knees hurt and a cough threatened to well up. She stifled it somehow. She was so close, she couldn’t give up, not now. But fate had other plans.
She heard a shuffling noise. She stiffened. More shuffling. Her heart sank. Were her attempts going to be futile? She looked up and she had this sinking feeling that she was caught.
“Mama”, the little voice said. “Where are you going”? Her toddler was awake. Any thoughts of trying to get a few peaceful moments with a hot cup of coffee went down the drain. “Good morning sweetheart” she said, and scooped up the little one.
Nice and taut with a twist in the tail!
Deepak, thanks for the encouragement as always! I was a little nervous to publish it but I'm glad I did it anyway.
beautiful… really nice for a first attempt… 🙂
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Thank you, Archana! So glad you think so 🙂
Adorable
Thank you, Nitya! I read 'Panne'. Very beautifully written. I plan to browse through the rest of your posts soon!
ha ha so sweet 🙂
And I was thinking of the Yazidi girls… 😛 🙂
Thanks Indrani 🙂 It does sound a bit harsh in the beginning, doesn't it? But I'm not even remotely qualified to write about the horrors those girls face.
Cute and so painfully true 🙂 Nice work with the Microfiction!
Thank you so much! Co-sleeping problems 🙂
Hahaha..This is awesome. Really. Pretty good for a first attempt. I am sure every parent can relate. Especially the ones with toddlers (like us). 😛
Thank you dear Shantala! This is my story every morning because we still co-sleep and for some reason, Meera has been waking up really early these days. The struggle for a hot cup of coffee is very real lol!
Realistic & beautifully crafted 🙂
Thank you!
Cool
Thank you, Ruby!
LOL! Absolutely perfect. How I remember those days. Feeling captive.
Thank you, Teri! This is my story every morning 🙂 Co-sleeping problems!
Hah! Baby radar 1: mom 0
hahaha! I don't know how but she wins every time!
So cute! I can imagine the Mama Bond stealthness, moving silently and anxiously in the dark 🙂
Thank you, Bonnie! No wonder moms are like ninjas 🙂
Stumbled upon your blog. The image that I created in my mind after reading first para was that the lady was trying to escape from her home and going to taste freedom outside it. The twist was awesome!!
Thank you, Seeya! so glad you enjoyed reading it 🙂
That's what I call a post!
And a first attempt?!!!!!
So nice of you to say that, Saket! Thank you 🙂
That's a good one. You are good at keeping the suspense till the end.