Last night, she claimed another victim. He jumped off the roof, like she had ten years back.
I took up this job to stay close to her.
But the killing stops tonight. I won’t let my little girl linger around in this mortal world. Not anymore.
Tonight, I jump.
Nice and creepy! Thank you for sharing.
Thanks, Jolan 🙂
Damn! That was powerful and dark. It did make me wonder if the protagonist had something to do with her jumping to her own death ten years ago. Nicely done!
Thank you, Sanch! Maybe I should explore that angle when I have the freedom of adding more words 🙂 49 was tight!
Creepiness, grief, and fear all in 49 words. Well done!
Thanks, Margaret! 🙂
Yikes!
Very creepy, and you managed to tell a complete story!
Thanks, Anusha 🙂
I know, making it within the 49 words was hard this time but you nailed it , especially the last line.Good one ,Hema!
Thank you, Sara! I did get your comment, my site acts funny with comments sometimes. I haven’t been able to figure out why.
Did my comment vanish?
….linger around in this mortal world. this is so powerful.
Thanks, Kalpana 🙂
I really hope that this jumps ends the haunting. So sad!
Oh, I don’t want anyone else to jump! But if the MC does, I sure hope it puts and end to it all.
My last line was going to be “I’m taking her home.” Word count didn’t allow it :((
Very creepy
Thank you!
Even with a few lines you have us on the edge of our seats! Brilliant Hema!
Thank you , Sue ❤️❤️
Oh, that was both sad and hopeful. I’m glad the lost spirit won’t be lost anymore, but… 🙁
The word count didn’t allow me, but the final line was “I’m taking her home.” Thanks for reading, Asha ❤️
That danged word count! hahaha