Feathers in every color, fall from above. One lingers, kisses my palm. Motionless, I marvel at it.
Oh, the possibilities!
“Mama!” She screams. “I’m hungry!”
The feather melts away.
I light one more candle at the altar of lost ideas.
Feathers in every color, fall from above. One lingers, kisses my palm. Motionless, I marvel at it.
Oh, the possibilities!
“Mama!” She screams. “I’m hungry!”
The feather melts away.
I light one more candle at the altar of lost ideas.
Ha ha ha, brilliant. I love how you wove in the prompt with motherhood taking over the muse even time. And cool title!
Thank you, Shailaja. So glad you liked the title. The other one was “down-pour”but it was too punny lol!
I really love that last line. I can almost hear the long suffering sigh.
That long sigh! Hahaha! I don’t know how you do it with 2 kids, Tara!
caffeine.
The alter of lost ideas. OMG. YES. I feel like the size of it has grown and grown since becoming a mom. Loved the use of the prompt here and the sharp turn the story takes at your daughter’s voice.
Mine’s grown a lot since we moved to Singapore. She’s home until school starts in January 😭 The altar is growing 🙂 so good to hear from you, Lisa. Hope all is well ❤️
Such vivid imagery!
Thank you so much, Margaret!
Ah, that elusive muse! I love that kiddo interrupts and injects urgency into the narrator’s creative dreams.
Thank you, Asha!
Altar of lost ideas.I have a big one too.Loved the simplicity of expression, Hema.
Thank you, Sara! We’ve all been there for different reasons, haven’t we?
I love the altar of lost ideas! What a great expression.
Thank you, Anusha 🙂
Oh, man, I’ve been at that altar too many times to count… And I love how life interrupts this reverie.
Haha! Sometimes I’m amazed how we get anything done at all 🙂
The feather metaphor was interesting and the phrase “melts away” was a good way to tell the reader of the fantasy. May your days contain more time to concentrate soon!
Nate, thank you so much. I’d almost replaced “melts away” with “vanishes” to gain a word. Glad I decided against it. Here’s hoping 2018 is a better year, for writing and everything else!
I love the idea of feathers as ideas.
Thank you, Michelle!
This! So much this! Great ideas had a lost because of life and other influences. I loved how beautiful the writing was at the start and then the about-face you made with the daughter’s words.
I like the contrast between the light, airy feeling of the start and the heavy altar at the end.
That final line says it all! It can be frustrating when life gets in the way of creativity.
I can identify with this story SO MUCH. Kids can be so wonderful and infuriating, all at the same time.
Totally relatable. I came up with three flash fiction ideas yesterday. THREE! I can only vaguely remember one. *sigh*